Searria H.

Hi, Leegon. I'll review the first chapter here, and then I'll come back and review the second if you want me to. :D I like the personal conversation you have ...

I'm so sorry about taking a lifetime to get back to you on this. Apologies, dawgwriter. :) I think your characters are very natural, and I like that your main ...

Hi, Ranger51! So, I'm finally here to review as you requested about two months ago. :oops: Sorry about that. You are very in tune with the fantasy style with your ...

Hi, Dreamwalker! :) I don’t know how harsh I’ll be, but I’ll do my best. ;) I liked the general imagery and concept of this piece with the boy and ...

Hey, tigershark! :D I loved the concept and message of this piece. You've managed to explain an emotion in a new and original way. I can only say I hope ...

Hello. :) I really enjoyed this. You had a wonderful blend of humour and seriousness that's hard to accomplish (for me anyway). Your dialogue seemed very natural for the characters, ...

Hello, Muffin. :) I like how you twist to a different POV. :D I would write at the top, center who the speaker is in each chapter. I like this ...

Hello, Velar! As the others have said, your plot was well developed, and I liked the concept of your characters. All of your concepts were very creative. :) I hardly ...

Muffin, I loved this. It made me laugh. You really pulled off the awkward, yet cute mood. :D Normally, I'm not really one for the school stories, but this was ...

I love the feel you have with this story! Very mysterious. I was really hoping something terrible would happen to the brothers, though. Oh, well. I guess on murdering the ...

Hello, Llama! :elephant: Very good beginning. :D Your characters work very well together, and you set the premise nicely. The first thing I noticed was that you used the phrase ...

:shock: This was absolutely fantastic, Brie. I can honestly say this is my favourite from you, perhaps because I can personally relate to this piece, and it really made an ...

I'm not sure this was my favourite work from you, but I didn't dislike it particularly. It was a whole lot of telling, not enough showing, for me. You're usually ...

Hello again, Brie! *shudder* Oooh! Creepy. I must say that I love the title. I went through the whole piece thinking, "How is she going to pull the title into ...

You developed this poem quite a bit, Brie. Things I was guessing at in the first poem were elaborated in this one. Good job. :D I agree with the others ...